WALT - write a narrative story about the given picture prompt.
SUCCESS CRITERIA -
use show not tell sentences so that the reader can visualize what is happening in his/her head.
Use figurative language like metaphor, simile, personification, onomatopoeia, alliteration and so on.
nouns
adjectives
verbs
adverbs
conjunctions
Figurative language
Sini
Sione
Teariki
Poor
Willing
Impossible
& serious
Finding
Decide
Avoid
& prepair
One day I woke up to the beautiful birds singing and then I did not know where I was. While I searched the place where I was then I look to my left there was Sione and on my right there was Sini my 2 best mates from school.
When we got together we made forts everywhere and we made spears knifes and plenty more items. After we finished all that we went out to go hunting for food Then we heard other people talking and walking.
Later we were following where we were then we came to a small village with food but we didn't have any money to spend so then we walked back and made a track to where we were going.
So that we know where to go and where to get shelter if our forts get busted. While we walked back we saw a big reindeer looking for food as well then I grabbed my bow and arrow and shot it.
Sini was saying " Shoot it i'm starving" I replied to him " Just wait I need to get a clear shot". After I shot it I sparked a fire sione went to get some more firewood and Sini was preparing the food for us to eat.
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Friday, 8 July 2016
Thursday, 7 July 2016
My father painting the roof.
"Hey dad" I said to him impolitely "what are you doing"? He replied when he walked up the ladder and then he looked down at the floor and he said " I'm going to fall off if I don't be careful.
After that he called out my name but mum said " he's not here but what do you want" he replied " can you fetch me a bucket of paint in the shed the colour is purple my mum loved it.
When I got home I saw my dad on the floor lying down with the purple paint on the furniture and I was calling for mum but mum wasn't to be seen anywhere so then I tried to help dad but he didn't budge.
Then mum came home with a handful of shopping I called out to mum she ran to the lounge and said " What happened" I replied " When I walked into the lounge I saw him on the floor crying and hurt.
While mum was feeling his body to see if he was hurt she said " He's hurt really bad " I said " what really hurts" she replied " No more chit chat go and get the landline Dial 111" I grabbed the phone and dialed what I was supposed to I could hear the Ambulance arriving with their loud sirens.
When we arrived at the Hospital I saw the nurse's running as fast as lightning then they opened the car door I was the first one to jump out the mum after her was dad. Dad was taken into the adult part of the hospital and then we weren't aloud to go where dad was going. After when we were waiting for dad ( It took 2 or 3 hours for them to do what ever that they were doing.
Later on that night we were in the starship hospital and then mum took me to Ronald Mc donald house and ate pizza and mini pies plus milo for our drinks.
After that he called out my name but mum said " he's not here but what do you want" he replied " can you fetch me a bucket of paint in the shed the colour is purple my mum loved it.
When I got home I saw my dad on the floor lying down with the purple paint on the furniture and I was calling for mum but mum wasn't to be seen anywhere so then I tried to help dad but he didn't budge.
Then mum came home with a handful of shopping I called out to mum she ran to the lounge and said " What happened" I replied " When I walked into the lounge I saw him on the floor crying and hurt.
While mum was feeling his body to see if he was hurt she said " He's hurt really bad " I said " what really hurts" she replied " No more chit chat go and get the landline Dial 111" I grabbed the phone and dialed what I was supposed to I could hear the Ambulance arriving with their loud sirens.
When we arrived at the Hospital I saw the nurse's running as fast as lightning then they opened the car door I was the first one to jump out the mum after her was dad. Dad was taken into the adult part of the hospital and then we weren't aloud to go where dad was going. After when we were waiting for dad ( It took 2 or 3 hours for them to do what ever that they were doing.
Later on that night we were in the starship hospital and then mum took me to Ronald Mc donald house and ate pizza and mini pies plus milo for our drinks.
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