WALT: Write about a moment in time.
Success Criteria:
- Imagery
- Illustrations
- Personification
- Metaphor
- Simile
- Adjective.
One day I woke up with lovely breakfast on my lap and it was scrambled on toast with bacon and a cup of orange juice. When I went into the shower I was smelling like roses and blueberry. After my shower I was walking to the lounge and see if my siblings were in there watching Cartoons network.
When my mum walked into the lounge to see if we are alright and she said “ Grandma is coming to pick use up for the day and she will bring use back home by lunch time have fun and be good look after your siblings most of all look after grandma just incase if anything happens.
After we heard the toot and mum shouted “ It’s grandma love use kids and have fun” we replied “ We will and we love you to”. We ran to the van and we were excited to see her while I was opening up the van door we bounced into our seats like a kangaroo.
Later we arrived in glen innes centre and we bought chicken and chips and we walked to the toy store and my grandma and I bought my siblings toys. When my grandma said “It’s time go home now it’s 12:00 and we got to get home before it’s startes to rain” and we replied “Yes grandma we are quite tired”.
T comment: room 7 enjoyed hearing about your wonderful family. You said you made it up? Students said it was very descriptive. Next steps: please add a bit more imagery.
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